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| spud (profile) wrote, on 2-11-2008 at 5:33pm | |
| well, i got my script done. it's shitty. the dialogue is bad. i'm pretty sure it's formatted incorrectly. which is honestly no fault of mine, since he gave us a bunch of different examples, each of which was ambiguous, and different from the next. but at least it's done. i'm pretty sure he's a terrible professor. good guy, knows a lot about film, but terrible at teaching. which is unfortunate. here you go: FADE IN: INT – OFFICE – DAY The office is brightly lit, but dark furnishings and wall coverings are ominous still. PHIL – the boss - sits, lost in thought examining paperwork, in a very imposing chair behind a large oak desk, with a large window behind showing the side of a neighboring skyscraper. There is a KNOCK at the door. PHIL Come in. JOHN enters, not timidly, but cautiously. JOHN You wanted to see me, sir? PHIL Yes, please sit down. I’ll be with you in a moment. JOHN obeys and sits in front of the desk, looking around the room, absently fidgeting with his clothes. PHIL continues to be absorbed in paperwork PHIL (CONT’D) Sorry to keep you waiting, but I really needed to finish that. JOHN Oh, it’s no problem. So, you wanted to see me? PHIL Yes, John. I’ve been hearing some very disconcerting rumors regarding your conscientiousness and devotion to your work. JOHN (pause)... Is that so? PHIL Yes. I understand that you habitually leave early for and return late from your lunch breaks, but fix the numbers on the computer. You have also been known to use a hostile tone when speaking to customers. And you don’t always file your reports on time. We’re considering putting you on monitored probation. JOHN Probation!? I’ve been with this company for over ten years! And now you’re threatening me? After all I’ve done for you.... PHIL I’m sorry John, but we have standards to adhere to. And we have to ensure that all of our employees, even those who have been with us for a long time, are adhering to those standards. JOHN (increasingly upset) Standards, eh? The way I see it, the standards of this company went out the door the moment they let you start running the show! You’re more concerned about keeping up appearances, and a healthy bottom line for the stockholders, than you are about taking care of the very people who take care of you! What would you do without people like me, Phil? We work hard every single day, doing all of the menial, mundane, thankless tasks, which – if gone undone – would bring this operation to the ground. And you don’t even give us a long enough lunch to go across the street for a bagel! PHIL We have a cafeteria he... JOHN (cuts him off, yelling) I don’t care if there’s some shitty cafeteria in this fucking building! I want options! I want freedom: I want to be able to choose to go to Joe’s café for a coffee and a bagel on my lunch break, and not get fired for it. I want to be able to stop what I’m doing for five minutes, so I can take a piss, without having it docked from my pay. JOHN stands up and BANGS his fist on the desk, angrily. JOHN (CONT’D) I’m sick and goddamn tired of spending every day dreading coming into work, because I know I’ll spend it looking over my shoulder, waiting for the other shoe to drop. We would honestly get more work done, in a shorter amount of time, if we were provided a more relaxed work environment. But instead we’re all just quaking in our little cubicles, waiting for your minions to waltz up to our desk and tell us to box up our stuff because we used a No. 2 pencil instead of blue or black ink on our latest efficiency progress report! PHIL (Very long pause) Well.... JOHN sits, somewhat awkwardly; anticlimactic. PHIL (CONT’D) ... It’s clear you’re upset with the way things are run around here, and that you’re intimately familiar with the needs and desires of our employees. It’s also evident that you’re not afraid to share your feelings and opinions on important matters with me. I’m creating a new position on my staff, “Employee Liaison/Advisor,” and these capacities make you the perfect candidate. What do you say? Would you like to join my cabinet? JOHN (pause) May I have some time to decide? PHIL Absolutely INT – CAFÉ – NIGHT JOHN sits alone at a table next to a window, with a bagel and coffee, and his laptop open beside them. He is composing an email, addressed to PHIL, stating simply “I’m in”. JOHN (to self) What are you doing? Can you even trust this guy? Well, I suppose he trusts you well enough. He exhales deeply, just before CLICKING “Send”. He closes the laptop, packing it in his bag, finishes eating the bagel, grabs the coffee, and walks out of the shop. FADE OUT |
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| Anonymous | 02-12-08 4:09pm It was good, for how long you had to do it. You should have given the guy more 'average' words to say, and in less structured sentences (not everyone talks like Christopher) and have him be more ridiculous. |
spud | Re:, 02-13-08 12:39am what are you talking about? everybody talks like me!
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