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| Kate (profile) wrote, on 11-4-2003 at 10:15pm | |
| Tell me which poem you like better. Tell me why too, if you can, but you don't need to. I used to believe Believed in you What you told me And what you could do A hero A valiant man Will you be him? Is there any way you can? Winded and weak Yet you still stand tall Never hiding Never going to fall A pure soul A heart longing to heal Waiting as you fight You're so very real You're brave You're alive You're strong You'll survive You are my hero. -OR- Sitting at the window Watching the world go by Rushing through the days The city will never die Each person lost in a sea In a crowd of nameless faces They never cease to hurry Always going to countless places I see them walk right past Behind my transparent boundry I've been waiting for so long Yet no one has ever found me They'll never notice this Poor soul behind the glass Not even a glance my way As they quickly go on past Lost in their own mind That's the way of the city Like another manufacturer Lacking compassion and pity |
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DartHaVoK | 11-04-03 10:30pm I like the second one better. It just sounds like a poem taht reprents almost every young person. it flows beautifully, great job Kate (Y) |
| Anonymous | The Second one, denfinetly., 11-05-03 5:29am Because I relate to it more, I guess. And because I don't believe in Hero's so much.
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fadingfallenstar | 11-05-03 5:55am I like them both..but i like the second one better. it shows exactly how it is..good job. |
rere12389 | 11-05-03 5:35pm i like the second one better. i'm not sure why. i guess its because i can relate to it more. |
rere12389 | 11-05-03 5:38pm wow ok this is crazy. i posted my comment and then i read the rest of them and i said like the same thing as someone else. weird stuff. |
kelso263 | 11-05-03 7:29pm i like the second one kate. boundry. hehe. where's dilemma? |
Kate | Re:, 11-05-03 7:40pm haha. I was using it for something else. |
PaintedOnMyMemory | 11-06-03 4:29pm I love 'em both. But, I'd have to say I liked the second one better. Because, as everybody else has said, I can relate to it more. I guess other people can as well.
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lil_bill06 | 11-07-03 5:05pm I like them both, but I'd have to say the second one. It's more compassionate and more poetry like. Good job on both of them though. |
A-Fire-Inside | 11-08-03 6:11pm I'd have to say I like the second one better. It tells how the world works, how people look upon other people... and one thing that I noticed was how someone would just walk past someone else, without giving them a glance... and if you think about it, that's kind of how the world works. You have to have so much of this, or so much of that to be considered equal or good in life. Sorry my comment was so long. Great job Kate.
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Tabletop | 11-08-03 9:54pm I like the second one better. It sounds like you believe in it more, and that helps the reader feel it. |
Jacqui-Chan | Poems, 11-09-03 9:12pm I like both of them a lot. But I think the second one is really truthful and I can relate to it more than the first. But no matter what, Rock on and write on!!
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softballchic | first one, 11-11-03 4:25pm I know no one else has said this but i like the first one better. don't know why just do. but both are good Kate |